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    dots Submission Name: Trappeddots

    Author: iluvpoetry_1
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 806/439/119
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1105
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       just found some poems!! old ones from like da 6th grade dont relly like this one! but w/e!

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Iím trapped in this depressing life
    Itís like all I want to do is keep
    Rewinding time. Go back to when
    I was younger and everyone paid attention
    to me.

    Sick of all the heartache I experience
    Everyday. People think Iím so happy
    But my life is really gray. No one knows
    The pain thatís burning in my heart

    Iím trapped in my own tears
    And sorrow. Full of hurt and the wonder to know
    Why I have this hurting feeling in my heart?


    Submitted on 2006-03-21 08:04:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the poem very much, the expression seems perfectly depressed, with the reference to the colour grey.
    I think this is a very good piece of work despite being old and i woul like to here more from you.
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Mr R | [ Reply to This ]
      Just work on that line spacing trust me. If the line spacing is off for just a moment it will throw the whole poem off.
    But I did like this poem. It is nicely written, I had to look for the rhythm thow. It caught my atention because I wrote a poem a long time ago with the same title. The funny thing is it sounded alot alike with the term of being trapped.
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]
      you've come a long way in your writing, this really shows that! humm... the site wants me to add more but I don't want to...
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you mean, "however" I had a rough childhood! I wish I could rewind time just once. The day my life went downwards! Anyways I can totally relate to this poem so I know where you're coming from! Keep up the excellent work, one comment down ALOT more 2 go (lol)
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]

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