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    dots Submission Name: Rosemarydots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 648
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 940



    Description:
       There is some symbolism here, don't know if everyone will get the complete meaning of this poem...but basically, do you like it?


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    dotsRosemarydots
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    a fragile rose petal fell like a feather at her feet
    a crimson velvet texture, she imagined, caressing the bare skin at her toes
    her name was Mary
    a godess of beauty
    her role in life, miraculous
    the power to create,godly

    a fragile life lived inside her womb
    occassionally allowing her to love it
    and when the life was able to be free
    the bond between son and mother was magic
    deeply spiritual
    like warm water holding precious words in an embrace

    and mary watched the child sleep
    and occasionally he would smile inside his dreams
    and his tiny hands caressed her fingers like that of a rose
    just as soft
    just as beautiful
    a perfect balance of man and woman
    from the arch between her thighs
    that even churches would use as a greeting
    she gave him life
    and she taketh away




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      occasionally he would smile inside his dreams

    My favorite line...Is it just me, or am I picking up some biblical references here, maybe a spiritual meaning...Her name is Mary, the "arch between her thighs that even churches would use as a greeting", little things make me think that maybe this is that Mary...I could be completely off. But that's what I get from it. Very pretty imagery...
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Jaz, this is a very good poem. Very descriptive (bradley says you are gay )*ack* and the flow is pheonominal. I like the last part of the poem
    "a perfect balance of man and woman
    from the arch between her thighs
    that even churches would use as a greeting
    she gave him life
    and she taketh away" That's very powerful words, anyway cya next period.
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      "like warm water holding precious words in an embrace" I loved that line. Very powerful. Discriptive.

    this poem is beautiful and the words placed perfectly together that when you read them they seem alive.
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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