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Final Dance


Author: goveiac
ASL Info:    30/M/Toronto
Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 57 /71 /61
Words: 137
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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Final Dance



With a pair of simple steps,
that helped to begin this part.
You had lead with your hands,
while I was steered by heart.

The only angel of my eye,
come on in so close to me.
Let me feel your abject pulse .
and smell your hair so honey sweet.

If this was the last second,
of my final day on earth.
I would leave a happy man,
I would leave a man with worth.

This song is almost ended,
and the tune has begun to fade.
Will this be my final chance,
or have I sealed my fate?

Let me kiss you now,
and hold you by the hand.
It is you I have loved so much,
it was you who changed this man.










Submitted on 2006-03-21 13:47:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  omfg! this sucks so bad i could [censored] cry!
| Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
  Alright so to everyone who says this is sweet-- get outta here! This is powerful! Men are not sweet, they are manly. This is an amazing piece written beautifully...but is in no way sweet. Yes it touches the heart, yes we see nthe couple dancing, but all in a mighty powerul way. Cute does not begin to describe it!
| Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
  Aww sweet. Wonderful sentiments, the outpour of emotions makes it good to read. I loved the last coupla lines. here i was thinking u were full of urself. lol. Good write.

Soph
| Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
  This is sooo sweet. You have put your emotions deeply into this I can tell. I love the second verse the most. I just wish I had a beat to hear it sang to.
| Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by rapius | [ Reply to This ]
  this is exactlywhat someones hopes would be written about them. its beautiful. brilliant. I love the first verse. It captures you.

AL
| Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  aww this was sweet, almost brang a tear to my eye... ow no wait it did lol, this was a lovely tribute.
thanx for sharing
x x x x
| Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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