Description: A poem I wrote for a girl to go along with a silver bracelet I gave her (the bracelet is shaped like two snakes stroking each other) .. no special meaning here, just tried to enbeautify a jewelry object with a fascinating story behind it :))
This was a great poem. I thought it was very creative and touching. It kept my attention unlike some other poems. The rythm was great and I thought that you worded it perfectly. I'm sorry I can't give much feedback but I really have nothing but good things to say about this poem.
This is an interesting write But Im sorry I do not see the connection between a bracelet and Life Life is forever and a bracelet can break and fall apart Its an interesting write But you did lose me in a few spots where the rhythm just did not meet God Bless Ron
This is an interesting poem. I found the flow to be pretty well done as well as the rhyme as you describe this bracelet as well as the relationship with this person all in one poem. You use lots of good descriptive words to allow the reader to connect with this piece. Sounds like a pretty cool bracelet and a most interesting relationship you two have. The last line sums this up really well. I think you did a fine job with this poem and I would imagine whoever you wrote this for felt that was as well. Take care.