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    dots Submission Name: Passion of an Internal Crydots
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    Author: Desser
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 89/95/44
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 189
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    Bytes: 1644



    Description:
       There's two meanings behind this poem that mean a lot to me. I tried my best to cross them into one to make it seem confusing on purpose. See if you can figure it out.


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    dotsPassion of an Internal Crydots
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    Waiting for the days to pass by
    It's like a hopeless dream
    But being with you, there's no lie
    That's what has been forseen.

    The voices of the breeze
    They whisper in my ear
    The news that they bring is such a tease
    O, how I wish you were here.

    Tell me why I wait
    Why is this worth my life
    Is it because I've seen passed the hate
    Passed the luxurious knife.

    Must I wait for the time
    A silent evil that shows no mercy
    A concept that keeps us all blind
    One that I wish I could cast cursory.

    I can't give up
    The days are narrowing down
    My life will be poured into your eternal cup
    And you and I shall have our crowns.

    I must wait with all the patience that I have
    I know you will not disappoint me
    I'll tell everyone that I can, even if they laugh
    But I know if they do, they do not know thee.

    I dream of this night
    When you take me away
    Such a thing gives a fright
    But I know I'll still stay.

    Can you hear these words
    Can you hear my internal cry
    My feelings overpower me in herds
    But I know with you in my heart I won't die.

    Just come right now
    Just burst through the shield of my world
    This place is so foul
    I want nothing more than to be twirled.

    "Patience my sweet
    You and I will become one
    And when we do meet
    The life that we wish for will be won."




    Submitted on 2006-03-21 14:41:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of a love and of god... someone you want to stay with and care so much for possible a significant other and then your eternal love which maybe you godly father i don't know you out looks on religion and i don't want to insult you, thats what i got from this piece. After reader you other one you just submitted i've noticed you definetely have a way with words. I love the rhyme schemes you use because they always or in these last 2 times work so well with what your trying to say. Very nice write and please keep submitting i think so far your writing is the one i can most relate to. Talk to you soon. Amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by amber_in_wyomin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very unique writing and I to feel as if you are talking about God or your eternal love within your heart. so beautifully written and deeply expressed an Excelllant write.


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    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]



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