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    dots Submission Name: I Woke Up Beautiful-Demo versdots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    36/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 2397/1162/153
    Words: 338
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 236
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2022



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       This is the final version of this song..sent in for demo'ing. A big thanks to Phil for helping me out a bit and to JPF friends.


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    dotsI Woke Up Beautiful-Demo versdots
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    I was so surprised
    first time I caught you staring'
    Cuz the look in your eyes
    Said you saw some magic here and
    I wondered if you could see
    Enough to wanna be near me
    But when we speak
    I know you really do hear me
    I’ve changed my point of view
    and it's all because of you

    One day I woke up beautiful
    with never closin' my eyes
    I woke up beautiful
    and now I finally see
    Your love has made me believe
    I like who I can be
    I woke up beautiful to me

    I just can't believe
    my luck on the day you found me
    Sometimes still can't conceive
    that you'd build your world around me
    With you I feel brave, unafraid,
    So travel my own way
    Explore who I am
    Ignore what other people say
    I've changed my point of view
    and it's all because of you

    One day I woke up beautiful
    with never closin' my eyes
    I woke up beautiful
    and now I finally see
    Your love has made me believe
    I like who I can be
    I woke up beautiful to me

    When I look in the mirror
    I still don't see everything you see
    Now the little imperfections
    Somehow make me unique
    Cuz when I'm wrapped up in your arms
    I know that I'm perfect for you
    It's there in the way you look at me
    In the things you say and do
    (and because of you)

    One day I woke up beautiful
    with never closing my eyes
    I woke up beautiful
    and now I see what you see
    your love has made me believe
    I like who I can be
    I woke up beautiful to me

    (one day I woke up beautiful to me
    with never closing my eyes I woke up beautiful to me
    all because of you
    I woke up beautiful to me
    I woke up beautiful to me)





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      Well I don't know. All I can say is the concept behind this is cool, but there must be something wrong with me as i can't antthing from it. guess i just got in the go down deeper way of thinking. I just don't get the feel of this. also i am having a hard time with the flow.

    oh well if the recording company can fix that it was worth your time and effort, sorry i couldn't be of any help. i wanted to , but you know me.makes me feel like i let ya down.
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful
    I am not just saying that either
    This write really touched me
    I too went thru a spell where I hated everything about myself and It wasnt until I saw the beautiful eyes of my Mother and Little sister that I knew my life was beautiful too
    I really loved this
    Thank You for sharing
    God Bless
    Ron

    And how lucky you are to have 2 beautiful children to enjoy life with
    I sincerelly hope they are doing well
    I do have 2 little sisters but my one sister has asked me not to bring her up in any of my writes so I respect that
    My other little sister is my world
    She is severly handicapped and has Downs Syndrome but trust me there is no one with a bigger heart then her
    She cant feel negativity and only knows Love
    Kind of makes you think
    Who truly are the gifted ones
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      feeling beautiful because of someone is a rare thing, i always thought if a girl made me feel beautiful even though i was hungover and hadn't taken a bath for a week, she was the one (that, unfortunately, hasn't happened yet).

    i'm guessing this song is kinda poppy with a catchy chorus. can't really add any improvement, except for the point of view part, i dont know it didn't feel right, but then it could be managed by the music itself.

    overall a feel good song. i'd listen to it. and i'd wish i could do it too (wake up feeling beautiful).

    peace.
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nice. I like it when someone makes you feel better about yourself.

    Your love has made me believe
    I like who I can be
    I woke up beautiful to me

    I like how you say that: "beautiful to me."

    Finding confidence in yourself is probably the hardest thing to do, and for women, finding confidence with your looks is even harder. The only thing about this is I wish you'd say he'd only made you realize that you were beautiful all along (because you are). This is a wonderful song, Amy

    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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