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    dots Submission Name: The Bloodingdots
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    Author: The_Forsaken1
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 18/25/11
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
    Total Views: 174
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 623



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    dotsThe Bloodingdots
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    Broken,
    Lifeless,
    I stand alone,
    Cuting,
    Tearing,
    Devouring me,
    Flooding,
    Flowing,
    Set me Free,
    Dead,
    Dying,
    Bleed into me.

    Twisting,
    Turning,
    My dreams erupt,
    Broken,
    Jaded,
    The memories flow,
    Awakening,
    Breathing,
    My life is made new,
    Hunger,
    Sweet hunger,
    Let sweet crimson flow,
    Allowing my new life to begin to grow

    The sights
    The sounds
    That were made anew
    Is nothing compared to the curse I give to you.




    Submitted on 2006-03-21 16:00:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice peice. I agree with SK, The one worded lines definately bring a sense of purpose to the poem as a whole. It sound erotic at places, which is nearly impossible not to do when it comes to this topic. Vampirism is a very intiment subject. I really like the last line. It leaves that sort of lasting thought in your mind. Like it could just echo through your mind all night. (Remember to comment other people too. I think you loose the ability to recieve comments after a certian point. just a heads up.) Anyways, I liked the this write overall. One of my favorite poetic subjects.

    Your Beautiful Nightmare,
    Lilly

    PS: I don't eggaturate. :) lol
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Lilithe_Aislin | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh this sent shivers up my spine, i like how it is mainly one worded lines, makes it more powereful and shokin,
    thanx for sharing
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]



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