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    dots Submission Name: Love In The Darknessdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 862
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Heres a poem I wrote the other day, not sure way just came to me.


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    dotsLove In The Darknessdots
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    This Passion,
    this lust,
    I give you everything,
    In trust.

    All I want,
    All I need,
    Here's my heart,
    Don't make it bleed.

    Hold me,
    Love me,
    All Ove thee above.
    Please don't hide in the shadows,
    Show me your love.




    Submitted on 2006-03-21 18:34:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When you are one like me, who hides in the shadows when it comes to relationships out of fear of being hurt, you are exposed in this poem. Demanded to be open but not from these feelings you have. The shortness makes it not very emotional.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by bran_flake | [ Reply to This ]
      This was simple yet eloquent and with little musings of love - reveal yourself to me & do not hide in the shadows where so much hides - be my light & my way!
    very well done girl! Love makes a difference doesn't "IT"!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      itís good , I like it , specially when you said :
    Here's my heart,
    Don't make it bleed.
    It's just that for the rhyme in lust and trust, it didnít seem pretty good , itís like in trust isnít in its perfect place you know , anyway maybe it's just me, but in general it was good :)
    p.s: thanks for adding my :Ēyou in me ď to your favorites
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      short sweet and to the point. i love the topic and i think it was a great write. sorry i couldnt give you much more than this.
    -brandon
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple and sweet. Nicely put and very eloquent. It's so short, I can't find much, if anything wrong with it. The theme is clear and dipicted well, and the emotion was strong. Hehe, it's interesting that the review is longer than the actuall piece, whatev. Short pieces can be just as amazing as the long ones. Lovely piece. Much luv.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by LivingShadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this.
    it is love in the darkness
    but because its so short, for some reason i dont like the rhyming all that much.
    but its pretty cool.
    sorry i didnt have much to say.
    i have a lack of words right now.
    <3
    | Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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