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    Author: Miss Mihu
    Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 3/4/7
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 556
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I'm in a very critical and dramatic state of being right now. I don't think this is very good.... it was just my soul blogging out. I'm not even sure what I wrote......... I don't prefer this piece....


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    The tears run through my soul
    I shan't cry on the outside
    For I feel I'd be branded a fool
    This way I'm able to hide
    Hide from society
    You see I know what I have done
    What I wanted
    I wanted to sin
    Sin with him
    But I didn't know the truth
    The truth that would kill me
    Kill my heart
    Today's youth is not wise
    I should know
    I'm apart of it
    These decisions I've made hath made life so much more difficult
    And complicated
    Why do I seek love at such a young age?
    Society!
    Yes society.
    I blame it on you
    For you are the reason I look for an older guy
    A guy who should know better and put me in my place....
    But I havent been yet
    And it's hurting me in the long run....




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