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    dots Submission Name: To Youdots
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    Author: AngelOutlaw
    ASL Info:    21/female/OR & WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 672/392/64
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Prose/Me
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    Bytes: 372



    Description:
       School assignment to write a response to Walt Whitman's "To You". I thought it was cool.


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    dotsTo Youdots
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    Apathetic existence,
    Numb to the world.
    Faceless creature,
    Left in vanity's wake.
    Singsong silence,
    Echo of the dying.

    Hell fire's passion;
    Olympus' fury;
    Rose's essence;
    By ashes smothered.

    Exhales dispair,
    Breathes in innocence.

    Whoever I am.




    Submitted on 2006-03-21 19:57:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Singsong silence,
    Echo of the dying.

    Exhales dispair,
    Breathes in innocence.

    these lines were really cool. i didn't read To You so i really don't get what points u were trying to get across but i do like the poem even if i'm oblivious to the meaning behind. it. oh yeah Song of Solomon kicks ass!
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I am kinda confused, maybe it is too early, but this meaning was lost to me. I dod however like the actual words in this piece, the obvious emotin, I think I just don't get it..
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by manicsmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      This seems to be directed to someone...because of title and content. It shows alot of lothing and disgust. A very abstract work. It conveys feelings, but I am lost in detail, leaves me to wonder who caused these feelings and how. If it was someone you know and you gave it to thembecause they had wronged you...I am sure they would know right away how you felt. But to the common reader it is much harder to desern.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Noah | [ Reply to This ]


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