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    dots Submission Name: confessiondots

    Author: mixedemotions00
    ASL Info:    24/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    6.26 - 574/377/69
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    i swallow these pills
    with the tea that i知 craving,
    heavy heart sinking
    below fear that won稚 shrink
    these lies that i知 fighting
    like art show me truth
    i知 dying from fright
    while creating new life

    if i let my mind and my crystal ball decide,
    it won稚 be life for long
    and all i値l have is regret
    and a sad look
    and his arms.

    Submitted on 2006-03-22 00:23:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What is there to do when one feels lost? Is there a road to take that will bring salvation or are we destined to live a life full of despair and only death will bring any peace? Life is a hard riddle, the truth though will be found in the question and not the answer. Life is like a mathematical equation except that it can't be solved because there are too many variables. Sometimes we realize too late that the answer lies in the question and then nothing can be done.

    I really enjoyed your poem. I could really relate to it. It is as if there is a lost person who can't find their way back. What is the truth that you search for? What is it that you seek? When will you find peace?

    Your poem was like a puzzle that looks confusing when connected but makes perfect sense when it is broken into pieces. Great poem. It was really wonderful.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there

    What a great intro, "i swallow these pills
    with the tea that i知 craving"
    This is such a deep poem and not all is clear to me, but I loved this line: "like art show me truth" and "while creating new life". I enjoy art myself and in my eyes you can kinda "create life" with a paint brush. So, the two lines may not have anything to do with what I just said, but thats the feeling I got.

    The second verse is quite clear to me and yeh, a feeling that im sure all of us go through, some time in our lives.

    Loved it!
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Lee | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece. it gave me the feeling that a woman was trying to get rid of her woe's and sadness. like the part where she was taking the pills, as if she was taking them to escape the reality that holds the sadness. thats what i got out of it. great poem

    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]

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