Description: Well, I actually wrote this for the "weather man" competition, but found it a bit to serious for the occasion. Geezh, whats wrong with me, try to write something funny, but it always ends up being serious!! LOL
Enjoy!
Climate Control -------------------------------------------
Sunshine and rain, wind and snow
How unique,
Four seasons all in one day
A forecast would have prepared me great
An umbrella for cover
from hailing words and stormy burst
and the warmth of a blanket
to snuggle up when I am hurt
Yes, it’s true
I don’t always know if you’re summer or grey
but the fact of not knowing
makes me come back everyday
Give it all you have
come and look
my house’s foundation is build on rock
you’re forces persist to brake me down
but instead
they have made me strong
Calm down now, make the fury go
Let the sun shine thru
this frosted heart of yours
that was definitely my favourite line and with your permission i ll use them to write a poem because i find them inspiring, your poem was really good but definitely not funny.
You are sure enough right it did end up serious. Hey I am out of Iraq and life is, much more complicated over here. I am off to Germany in a few days. So now about the poem. Four seasons in one day, isn't that supposed to happen around Armagedeon? Just kidding. Seriously though. The line that goes it is true I don't know if you are summer or grey leads me to believe this is about a person more so than it is about the actual climate. I thought it was always hot in Africa? I feels like a person who is emotional, irrashional, and can only be calmed by your presence. Sort of like beauty and the beast. You dig? Although it was not funny is was still definately worth a read.
Keep it serious girl! This is a wonderful piece in its simplicity. Layered like I love them.
It can be destiny or life you are talking about. It can also be about a lover. And this is what I want to believe. The lover's theory. And a moody lover you've got! It is like this moodiness is keeping u under some sort of a spell. A spell that keeps u coming back for more. At a certain point we feel that the lover is putting u under test to check the strength of ur love.
It is like he had his heart broken b4 and is afraid to let love in again and u r the one trying to pull him out.
Just like life, it tries us sends us all kinds of rocks on the road, we go past them, around them, break them and we keep going.
Great write. Keep it serious, if serious is always that good
I think that if you entered it, you would have a considerable chance to win, even though I haven't gotten a chance to read any of them. I enjoyed reading it, with its many hidden meanings.
I like the powerful words and sentences you used, so good job on that. Thanks for sharing, Keep it up
Submission Name: Climate Control
Abbas