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    dots Submission Name: Shopping For Springdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 551
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 981

       Just wanted to write something...

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    dotsShopping For Springdots

    Scantily clad in her garment of hope,
    She tries to cast off a cloak of shame.
    It is far too warm to go on wearing these things,
    And they always look the same.
    She needs a new style for the days to come
    Something a little more modern than that awful cloak.
    Perhaps a nice sheath of purity,
    Or a tasteful cloud of smoke.
    She's tired of viewing the world through her rose colored glasses,
    Besides, they've become so dark they hide her eyes...
    And there's no way to make these glass slippers fit,
    It doesn't matter how hard she tries.
    She needs a new way to style her hair,
    Something that's yet to be seen,
    And maybe some colored contacts for her eyes
    To cover up the green
    She patiently waits for the mail to come
    Wondering what the postman will bring
    She needs the funds to buy her happiness
    And a new wardrobe for spring...

    Submitted on 2006-03-22 07:55:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is pretty, and uncomplicated in the emotion department
    i like the way this feels, girly and light, and just alive, shallow sort of, but not in a bad way
    in a sweetly innocent and freeing way

    lovely little piece you have here
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't know about this. *raises eyebrows to show confusion* What exactly were you trying to say? I think i like the idea, I mean to me it sounds like this girl is trying to become reborn, and she has chosen a wonderful time to do it, in the spring when reproduction is mother natures largest concern. This poem doesn't sound 'you' and maybe that is why I was originally confused. But when thought is applied I think it turns out to be a rather nice poem.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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