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    dots Submission Name: Hatred's Hostagedots

    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    21/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 178/204/42
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I finally finished this poem. If you are looking for bees and posies, I suggest you look elsewhere. Perhaps I will add more to it when further inspired. I hope you get the message, if you don't feel free to PM me.

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    dotsHatred's Hostagedots

    i'm twisting in an endless tunnel
    disfigured as I fall
    into the blackened depths of Hatred
    i'm diving soul and all

    i'm moving in the weightless air
    it hits my distorted face
    flashing, blazing, stabbing white
    falling sheets of lace

    tripping in the deepening purple
    fighting, biting air
    i see it in your yellow eyes
    i see it in your stare

    the Hate consumes me all in all
    my inner flesh, it rips
    void of feeling otherwise
    with cold and lifeless lips

    it's all I have to hold me here
    to sheild me from all pain
    this horrid thing that keeps my life
    and goes by Hatreds name

    oh woe is me the saddened girl
    who's held by Loathing's hands
    but without it i could live, no more
    without it i can't stand

    Submitted on 2006-03-22 16:15:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I say the line between love and hate is drawn here. You hate because you loved. Howeer hate isn't love and shouldn't be used but its various causes can be seen in this piece. Great work, comment on mine sometime missed talking to ya, sorry for what i said.
    | Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]
      I've always said that there is a fine line between love and hate, and sometimes the two intermingle. Whether this is about love, hate, or just a feeling of entrappment, one can guess.

    However, the rhyme was very very good and you are very consistent in the standard of what you write. You are very talented and I have no doubt, that you have the potential of great things within you.

    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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