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    dots Submission Name: cuts and bruisesdots
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    Author: hoobenji
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 3/14/9
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 649
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 400



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    cuts and bruises shes hurt for life,
    they will always be her painful reminder of
    her past,she will remember she lost every
    friend and thing she had.they all left her behind,except the scars that remain by her side,
    not a day will pass by,that she does not want to
    die,many tears to come for her to cry,and i guess
    thats how it will be,because that she is me!




    Submitted on 2006-03-22 16:36:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww yes cutting and mutalation. A very popular piece to write. I can't say it's orginal but I like these poems because I am cutter and relate to everyone. I liked it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, trash the exclamation at the end and this poem would be pretty cool. Ohterwise than that, I really liked it, but I wouldn't classify this as a gothic poem...more angst than anything.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this peom, but i suggest you get rid of the exclamation from the last line. It takes away from the subtle emotion within the peom.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]


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