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    dots Submission Name: New Constructiondots
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    Author: Kersofmia
    ASL Info:    19/m/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 111/84/44
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 336
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    A man once told me,
    "Life is what you make it"

    As if with hammer and nail you could build serenity,
    But where is the home depot of the mind?
    My only tools seem useless in this project,
    And I am unable to get the permits,

    Constant recalls and manufacturing errors,
    Stunt my abilities to reach my goal,
    And I fear the arrival of an inspector,
    Because I may have a structual defect,

    But I continue with my efforts,
    Even with a carpentars thumb throbbing,
    Staring at what stands on my foundation,
    I just don't see it matching the blueprints,

    But even with all this I still build,
    To one day have the life of my dreams...




    Submitted on 2006-03-22 20:53:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really cute poem. I enjoyed reading this and I love what you did with this poem. It is very creative and it made me smile as I read it. It is full of so much truth in a humorous kind of way that it was really enjoyable to read. I love all the references to the construction and various phases of building here. I dont think I have ever read a poem similar to this one so my hats off to you for the creativity here. This is really good and all the best wishes to you. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Reminds me of that movie... with that Star-Wars-Christensen-guy.

    Well nobody can really say if what that man said was true... with that whole everything being predestined [censored]... but we need to believe that it is. It is the only way we'll be able to accept death without regrets.

    Actually, you can build serenity with a hammer and a nail. It is through accepting the fact that it is no more than a hammer and a nail. That it has limitations that only you can know in the end.

    Aren't you just excited to know what those are?

    Well you won't if you stop building.
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      thats pretty clever...you need to just look at life without your blueprint, because the best kinda life to have is a free and spontanious one.... one wouldn't really be free if everything was set out already...it's just another rule that begs you to break it...

    anyway, this was a very cute and clever way to look at misfortunes that cause life to go the complete opposite way than you want it...loved the home depot of the mind thing.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      I had to laugh and enjoy this piece. It seems to fit the smudged blueprints of everyone.
    Failure,failure,but there remains hope. Hope diminished yet ambitions of the heart flutters to a dream.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]



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