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    dots Submission Name: Thug'z Prayerdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Description:
       My way of asking the Lord for forgiveness!!!


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    dotsThug'z Prayerdots
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    As I clasp my hands together,
    And fall on my knees for prayer,
    I'm hoping to see the light,

    My life has always been bad weather,
    And regardless of my unanswered prayers,
    I know I can overcome this night,

    Amounts of sins in layers,
    Only made it seem praying wasn't clever,
    Yet I'll still pray with all my might.

    Dear God I know my life is borrowed,
    So if I happen to die tomorrow,
    I know my faith was based upon good intentions,
    So hear my humble prayer,
    Because indeed I'm seeking for redemption.
    AMEN!





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      Good luck on survival, I'm glad you can write this. I like to hear about people making peace with god. Great write on telling how your prayers seemed to go unanswered and you still belived in god. And that sins in layers was great. keep up the good workand good luck
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ]


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