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Still my friend

Author: Darth Zeus
ASL Info:    21/F/Vacuum
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See my journal (that is from March 21)
I'm not looking for comliments or things that would make this write better.
It's just to get it of my chest

Still my friend

I had my birthday
you weren't there
Left nothing but a message
You disappointed me again
What a friend you were

You promised me to
make up to me
But didn't even call
Days have past, were I thought
You were no friend of mine

I did the same
to make you feel
what it's like to get
birthday wishes without my showing
I was nothing like a friend

Time has passed
but I couldn't wait
for you to take the phone
I knew you were relieved
that we were still friends

You told your story
and freaked me out
Made me feel guilty as hell
Where had I been
when you needed a friend?

I understand why
you didn't call
Your mind was somewhere else
I forgive you forgot me
You're still my friend

And though I've cursed you
whished to never see you
swore I didn't want to
Ever hear you again
I can forgive
because I can't let you go
Not now you need me
A friend I will be.

Submitted on 2006-03-23 02:18:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Janekke. This is the type of thing I am always stuck in between. Two of my closer friends are always saying things like what you mentioned in the beginning and middle of your poem about each other, and it really bugs me. Unfortunately, I don't have the courage to tell them how it makes me feel, so I continue to hear [two 'best friends'] complain about each other.
I don't know why you told me that this was not going to be as good as mine, because definately thought this was as good if not better. This was a sad write, which showed that true friendship can never be extinguished. I would completely understand the pain you felt during these times, but to tell you the truth, I don't think many of my friends are 'true.' They really don't seem to care what I think, and only boss me around. Anyways, you are a very good friend to forgive some one for what they did.

| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  sweet! I liked it a lot. :) Sometimes misunderstandings can ruin a good friendship... sometimes, you really need to give a lot without expecting anything back. Glad you're friends again. Hope this piece inspires others to seek contact with their long-lost pals.

| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by unREMb | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, Janneke, I'm glad you are able to be friends with this girl again and put the past to rest. Right now you both need eachother. This was well done and I'm glad you got things off your chest.

| Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  I really Loved this
There is nothing like A Good Friend to help ones Heart to Heal
True Friends are extremely Hard to come bye
I think you found one in this Friend
God Bless
| Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Truely sweet, I sorta understand how you feel because I have similar things happened to me. Won't say the same because I have no idea exactly what you went through I think I got the idea of it.

It was a truely wonderful write that shows the importance of human emotions and the essential connection real friends. You sound like a true friend regardless of what occurred, for what I see you had been unaware of whatever had transpired. So don't be too hard on yourself. Have faith.

Keep up the good write and have a blessed day.
| Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh jenneke, I loved it, I had this one person in my mind the whole time reading it....until I gpot to the end...he doesnt want to be MY friend, a good friend u must be. I know U didnt want this, but I liked it still.
| Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Reva Laine | [ Reply to This ]
  This was good to see. I like it for it's anecdotal nature. That's not spelled right, but I'm tired. There are a few nit picky things missing letters ect. that make it a lille trying to read, but that's probably manigfied by my fatigue. Anyway you said you didn't care to fix anythin, but if you want to know I'll come back and tell you. peace
| Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]

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