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    dots Submission Name: Still my frienddots
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    Author: Darth Zeus
    ASL Info:    21/F/Vacuum
    Elite Ratio:    7.31 - 369/226/34
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 1310
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1217



    Description:
       See my journal (that is from March 21)
    I'm not looking for comliments or things that would make this write better.
    It's just to get it of my chest


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    dotsStill my frienddots
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    I had my birthday
    you weren't there
    Left nothing but a message
    You disappointed me again
    What a friend you were

    You promised me to
    make up to me
    But didn't even call
    Days have past, were I thought
    You were no friend of mine

    I did the same
    to make you feel
    what it's like to get
    birthday wishes without my showing
    I was nothing like a friend

    Time has passed
    but I couldn't wait
    for you to take the phone
    I knew you were relieved
    that we were still friends

    You told your story
    and freaked me out
    Made me feel guilty as hell
    Where had I been
    when you needed a friend?

    I understand why
    you didn't call
    Your mind was somewhere else
    I forgive you forgot me
    You're still my friend

    And though I've cursed you
    whished to never see you
    swore I didn't want to
    Ever hear you again
    I can forgive
    because I can't let you go
    Not now you need me
    A friend I will be.





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    ||| Comments |||
      Janekke. This is the type of thing I am always stuck in between. Two of my closer friends are always saying things like what you mentioned in the beginning and middle of your poem about each other, and it really bugs me. Unfortunately, I don't have the courage to tell them how it makes me feel, so I continue to hear [two 'best friends'] complain about each other.
    I don't know why you told me that this was not going to be as good as mine, because definately thought this was as good if not better. This was a sad write, which showed that true friendship can never be extinguished. I would completely understand the pain you felt during these times, but to tell you the truth, I don't think many of my friends are 'true.' They really don't seem to care what I think, and only boss me around. Anyways, you are a very good friend to forgive some one for what they did.

    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      sweet! I liked it a lot. :) Sometimes misunderstandings can ruin a good friendship... sometimes, you really need to give a lot without expecting anything back. Glad you're friends again. Hope this piece inspires others to seek contact with their long-lost pals.

    Bann
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by unREMb | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, Janneke, I'm glad you are able to be friends with this girl again and put the past to rest. Right now you both need eachother. This was well done and I'm glad you got things off your chest.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I really Loved this
    There is nothing like A Good Friend to help ones Heart to Heal
    True Friends are extremely Hard to come bye
    I think you found one in this Friend
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Truely sweet, I sorta understand how you feel because I have similar things happened to me. Won't say the same because I have no idea exactly what you went through I think I got the idea of it.

    It was a truely wonderful write that shows the importance of human emotions and the essential connection real friends. You sound like a true friend regardless of what occurred, for what I see you had been unaware of whatever had transpired. So don't be too hard on yourself. Have faith.

    Keep up the good write and have a blessed day.
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh jenneke, I loved it, I had this one person in my mind the whole time reading it....until I gpot to the end...he doesnt want to be MY friend, a good friend u must be. I know U didnt want this, but I liked it still.
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Reva Laine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good to see. I like it for it's anecdotal nature. That's not spelled right, but I'm tired. There are a few nit picky things missing letters ect. that make it a lille trying to read, but that's probably manigfied by my fatigue. Anyway you said you didn't care to fix anythin, but if you want to know I'll come back and tell you. peace
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]


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