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    dots Submission Name: A Challenge to facedots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 1351
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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       Challenge- something in life has to create desire...


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    dotsA Challenge to facedots
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    Words to dance in the rhythm of life,
    With a light that lights thyself in the dark.
    All but thoughts to the peak as such,
    A challenge to face through for all that apart.

    Win in all a motto for purpose,
    Survival of the fittest as nature to be.
    Shall life be to the reason for a bird to fly?
    A challenge to face a challenge to see.

    Win not to lose as luck is on side,
    Edge of a mountain or a jump from a slide,
    Happens so as such with fire in rage,
    A challenge to face a challenge to abide.


    Give up shall not a spider to nest,
    Fall and cry does a child to stand.
    Hope in all that the heart to fulfill,
    A challenge to face on air on land.

    Smile as such should in the face of death,
    Laugh not thyself to be one in the sun.
    As sun to glow forever in demise,
    A challenge to face the one to be done.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Your efforts were well thought out and its obvious the time you put into this piece. However, I find that everything that you set out to accomplish with this was done so in the fourth stanza, which seemed delightfully reminiscent of Frost or late Yeats. The rest of it just felt like ornate fillers.

    MyX
    | Posted on 2009-08-08 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      your picture frightened me to call the guards and they were dis pleasured and beat all the air around me so that my shawl was risen above ankle.

    hence they were thrice dis pleasured and thrice beat the air around me to a savage squall
    and my shawl was risen above the thigh.

    to my shame I
    am pregnant.

    Hatma.

    | Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by InNoMood44Play | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoy reading this poem , it's a breathe of fresh air , especially a challenges , facing so many obstacles , each paragraph brings out a theme as you writie , most of all, after each challenge there is a new one, great poem , keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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