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    dots Submission Name: Hatedots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 1285
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 399

       Really hated someone while writing this.

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    The heat that melts, fire in the eyes,
    fury of nature, nothing to despise.
    Yet the ice that burns in the cold to apprise,
    hate with anger with madness with lies.

    Shall not thy thought burn in reality?
    May die thy thought of one with animality.

    Must the sky befall, through the hell of hell,
    the hate in power of seas to dwell.

    Submitted on 2006-03-23 02:55:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awsome,i love this i can really feel the emotion burning clear..bravo

    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the way you wrote this piece. It's amazing. You really can sense the intense anger you were feeling while writing this.
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Kelly17 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love that someone still writes as our language was ment to be wrote. The poem in itself was somthing I can tell really pained you at the time of its writing. Hate is powerful emotion. Keep writing

    The Forsaken One
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by The_Forsaken1 | [ Reply to This ]
      The person you hated sparked a real intense poem. I liked feeling the emotion when i read it. It was an easy topic to relate too. It sounded really poetic as well.
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn.. u must realy hate someone, this is a nice write... The fealing of hatred is felt in sence throughout the whole poem.
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]

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