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    dots Submission Name: Love me notdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    30/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.72 - 153/92/111
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       why not love me my maya i ask myself.


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    dotsLove me notdots
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    Love me not for shall i cry,
    for will i live, for the dream to die.
    In all my life in all my days,
    the flower that blooms, a bird to fly.

    May not shall nature have mercy on me,
    may not the world that curses on me.
    Will have the wonders to be one in a million,
    the journey to die, the journey to see.

    Love me not for my Maya to be,
    hate me not for your eyes to see.
    Will i smile with tears on my face,
    to live and die with you to be.

    for my Maya




    Submitted on 2006-03-23 02:58:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this poem is very well written,and i loved the flow and rythem over all.i also loved the way that you used a slitely rambleing style to show that you do love the person you wrote this for but the love isnt possable?its forbiddin?well,you get the idea.i hope to see more of your work on the site soon.

    Keep it real,
    Faith
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is nively written... I like it alot, the flow was great and the lyrical quality is in nive to. Great relation to love
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]


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