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    dots Submission Name: BOOK OF PROSEdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Romance
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       Anyone out there remember this feeling?


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    dotsBOOK OF PROSEdots
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    Thereís people out there peeping through the window,
    Thereís people out there listening at the door-
    So, grab your Book of Prose
    And donít you curl up close:
    Canít you see that someoneís coming across the floorÖ

    Your Mama might float in through the curtained window,
    Your Papa might walk in through that bolted door:
    Then, no point my studious frown
    When the book Iím holding is upside down:
    Donít think my heart can take this anymoreÖ

    Donít you plan to go home yet?
    You know this only makes your mama fret-
    And if she finds out, your nights out disappear:
    Donít you get me wrong,
    I lack your blind courage, but I love your song:
    Help me overcome my doubts and fearsÖ




    Submitted on 2006-03-23 05:31:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm...I don't remember this feeling, but maybe that's just me . Love the rhyming in it. I think I get what the poem is about, but I'm not absolutely sure. Love the Title, it fits well. Some of the rhythm was off, and in a poem that, it seems to me, is based around rhythm and rhyme, it really hurts it. Good write, and continue, please
    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]


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