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    dots Submission Name: Swallowed By Sleepdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSwallowed By Sleepdots
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    Sleep will swallow me
    like a hungry python.
    Eventually I'll cut my way
    from the beast's belly,
    wake up gasping and wet
    too soon after my red, raw eyes
    like clam shells closed.





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      Yeah, and do you want to know why your eyes are red and raw? 'Cause you spend all your time looking at a damm computer screen, that's why. Insomnia, on the other hand, really sucks. I have had horrible bouts of insomnia over the years. I have a piece about it somewhere if I can find it. But I probably don't have it anymore, I lost most of my writings when moved back home. I liked every line. -
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      That should be : sleep is supposed to....no matter how careful I type, I still have typos...........
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Sleep in supposed to soothe and refresh and you really aced this feeling of the opposite effects. I have woken up this way...wet and gasping amidst the lingering nightmares....red eyed and even more tired than before I slept....I used to have a real problem with nightmares. The doctor's called it post traumatic stress....It is better now but I on occasion I still wake up feeling like I had to claw my way back from the snakes belly....Great imagery. (I hate saying that BUT it is TRUE...great imagery.)
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      ooo i SO wish sleep would swallow me up! this is very cool though! i fully know where youre coming from! very good write
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like your poem. suffer from insomnia sometimes myself and you described it very well. I like the python image. for god's sake it's morning here so you won't give me nightmares. I once dreamed to be eaten by a huge snake. creepy.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      I did in fact read this, but declined to comment. The reason is that I know exactly what this feels like; in fact I have felt like this for the past few days. I wish whatever it is would spit me out and get it over with. I disagree with the insomnia comment by silverdog though, its like you sleep but awake feeling half digested. Uuugh! Just like you had to force your way out of it. This should make it an incredible write, but somehow it leaves me uncomfortable. Maybe when I'm feeling better?
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wickededly accurate depiction of the ravages of insomnia; I am SO thankful I don't have that problem anymore,--I just refuse to let ANYTHING bother me..consciously or otherwise--and a shot of Canadian whiskey in my Hot Chocolate doesn't hurt either (or if it does--I am oblivious to that particular pain)
    Kidding aside, this one seethes with anger, despair--and truth; I hope you soon find relief from this monster. Silver
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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