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    dots Submission Name: Velveteendots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 662
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       I'm not sure about this. Mostly it is one of those things that I wrote the first thing that came to mind.


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    dotsVelveteendots
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    In the boy's nursery the velveteen rabbit befriend the shabby old horse. The horse was made of burlap and the stitches were crooked and his nose was a faded black. He was ruff to the touch, resulting in a very long, very lonely shelf life inside the nursery. The rabbit was pink with one brown patch of fur around his eye. A blue ribbon strangled his kneck. The rabbit too, lived on the shelf. He was too perfect to stain, too new to play with.
    The velveteen rabbit spoke to the horse,
    " What does it mean to be real"
    In which the horse stood up, lights came on, music began to play in the background with horns and trumpets and banjo's and tamborines and the horse replied, " To be real...is to be old. I am old and shabby and as you may have noticed I am falling apart."
    "But aren't other things real?" The velveteen rabbit asked.
    "I am quite new and I was hoping most passionately that I...was reall."
    "No." said the horse.
    And for awhile there was silence as the velveteen rabbit pondered the words of the shabby old horse. He pondered the things that velveteen rabbits ponder when they are not sure.
    He pondered the meaning of his life and eventually after much mental trepidation concluded the final absolute truth of the matter.
    " You have lost your mind" said the velveteen rabbit.
    "Look at you, " said the shabby old horse. " You are a talking rabbit."




    Submitted on 2006-03-23 12:09:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, fun... For some reason I could see myself giving this response to someone about something. This horse has our reasoning skills. Very interesting write. And you say I'm going off in a weird direction....
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This also has comic value, especially the last few lines. The title is great, because velvet is a very nice cloth, and most people don't want to get it dirty. Which alludes to the line
    "He was too perfect to stain, too new to play with. " Well that's about all I can say about it, it's just well written. Two thumbs up!!
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]


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