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    dots Submission Name: House of Glassdots
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    Author: DeadPoetz
    ASL Info:    19/ Female/ Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 9/23/9
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 412
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    Description:
       I already submitted this poem to several sites such as DeviantArt ana Poetry.com. This had also been published in my school paper.


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    dotsHouse of Glassdots
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    The sun reflected off its surface,
    a prison of colors and rainbows
    in every angle.
    Its surface smooth,
    long graceful stems,
    elegant and demure.

    Fragile, so claims the thunder
    and lightning that struck.
    The glass shattered.
    Shards rest on the floor.
    No longer whole,
    a fallen angel from sky’s boundless.

    Graceful curves of the broken pieces,
    the iridescent glass- still forever glorious.
    Though the shards cause pain
    as the blood wine flowed,
    staining the goodness of life.
    The broken glass house,
    crystal clear.
    Its true nature revealed.




    Submitted on 2004-05-05 03:30:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it's a very good write, though i think u use 'the' in some places it doesn't need to be. ex: Shards rest on floor. one other thing, in the last stanza it should be Though the shards CAUSE pain. :)
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      joeyalphabet,
    thanks for the comment, i think i overlooked that one. i'll correct them...
    | Posted on 2004-05-10 00:00:00 | by DeadPoetz | [ Reply to This ]



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