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    dots Submission Name: Epitome of Blissdots
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    Author: DeadPoetz
    ASL Info:    19/ Female/ Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 9/23/9
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 413
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    Description:
       I tried to use strong imagery when writing emotional poems.


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    dotsEpitome of Blissdots
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    Dark petals- wilted
    in the plain eyes of men,
    black as the starless,
    lonesome night
    The cold wind swept
    across the desert.

    Jovial is dead,
    lost among the glitter sand
    and silver mirages.
    Hope- is only a distant dream.
    Bliss- has never existed.

    Dark petals fell
    on the hot sand,
    a seed buried – deep.
    It entered earth’s heart,
    in search
    of a new life.

    A new spark of flame ignited,
    Against the forgotten sand
    it grew and expanded.
    Till it penetrated the ocean’s
    blue barriers.

    It drifted on to the meadow,
    where heaven’s light shown,
    the sun’s warmth no longer scorch.
    Where the perfume of oleanders
    and lavenders scented the air.

    The scars of the past
    no longer ached.
    The ancient loneliness has left
    and gave way to hope
    and enchanted dreams
    in the epitome of bliss.




    Submitted on 2004-05-05 03:32:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. This is an excellent poem. I love the use of personification ("Jovial is dead") in which you turn a mood into a person. I also love how the petals from the flower have dug their way into the earth, eager to become something more.

    This poem is a very mature poem and is expertly written. You really do know your way with words, Hsiao.

    Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      This is my favorite style of writing. The last four lines affected me the most. I like the way you describe things poetic in nature but each line telling an equally elaborate story. Great job.

    ~frost~
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Frost | [ Reply to This ]



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