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    dots Submission Name: Photobookdots
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    Author: Flynn
    ASL Info:    19/M/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 69/100/39
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 245
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 864



    Description:
       WARNING: This is one of those two minute poems. This is not my strength... it is something of a weakness. Enjoy... at your own risk!!!

    Sorry about the horrible awfulness.

    Meant to show the difference between a child and a teen male. Nothing special.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsPhotobookdots
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    Turn the pages in my book, lets take a look and see
    The many photos held within - passed - which defines me
    Turn the yellow pages, the photos discolored and worn
    The photos of a time long passed - unable to discern

    It’s blurred, the colors odd - impossible to find
    The answer to the question of the child’s mind
    It’s gone and passed, never to return.

    Turn the pages in my book, to a more recent time
    The many photos held within -passed - which defines we
    Turn the whitened pages, the photos fresh and new
    The photos of a time just passed - able to learn

    It’s clear, the colors vibrant - to find the question of...
    The answer to the question of hearts - the love.
    It’s gone and passed, never to return.

    Never to return. Turn the page -




    Submitted on 2006-03-23 19:38:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The passing of time...an emotional ride, and one can only hope that they learn something from past experiences. Like looking through a photobook, flicking through memories in my head. Have to say big fan of your work will definitely keep on reading. Peace and inspiration.
    | Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      K, so I was a bit harsh on the last one--this one painted a vivid picture of the passing of time. The amount of detail and leangth were exceptional, as this was written very well. One thing you might change:
    "The answer to the question of the child’s mind"
    to
    The answers to the question of the child's mind

    as the child holds more than one question in his/her mind.

    But overall, very very well written (a complement that is rarely given by me).
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this was wonderful! The emotion so strong, oh, I thought I was going to shed a tear there for a second. The meaning so wonderful. I have to add this to faves. Wow...
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      You should enter a contest. YOu have ample amounts of tallent and I know you could win sooo much!! Do you want me to put this in a contest (not a crappy-fake-scam one but a good contest??)
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I love this! It is such a vivid masterpiece!!
    (try poetry more often)
    Very nice flow but the ening is vague.. is it the love thats gone or the time??

    Love you!
    Amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like how this can be read for surface value as the importance and meaning of photographs plastered into old books. I really like how the part changes between the 2nd and 4th stanzas but still remains the same. Symbolizing to me the changed view of the world between the two perspectives at different times of the same person.

    Good Write
    Viva
    ~nsnaakyhhh
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by nsnaakyhhh:) | [ Reply to This ]


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