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    Author: PROlifik
    ASL Info:    23/m/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.01 - 23/28/21
    Words: 627
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1435
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3577



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       second solo post,just writtin ya kno


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    i dont think you understand my actions so let me define it
    underline it,just to make sure you dont undermind it
    i'll outline it in these paragraphs so theres no need to get violent
    straight from the ear of the streets so you know im not silent
    deliever serenity inside sentances in these stanzas
    my photo remains invisable when taken by paparazzis cameras
    a whole new style for you to envy when your pad is empty
    an endless flow of creativity got me awating longevity
    you got sixty bars ill go seventy if you let me talent i got plenty
    the cure for the common rhyme i am the remedy im defending me
    accused of exploiting the game im exploding your brain
    fuck fame,im uploading my name,at the same time upholding the game
    demoating the lames that no matter what they spittin the same writtin in vain
    so im splittin your veins like samuel L im +switching lanes+ have ya whole crew walking wit canes
    like 50 said ya bones still gonna hurt when it rains
    you rappin lushes still holdin crushes i got ya girl splittin dutches im the master of punches
    one wrong move have you walking wit crutches
    how you want me to rip it?i can go off topic- the dome off the top of it and you couldnt top it
    go off on you tell you beg me to stop it,that hard shit ill rock it im electric like metal objects ina socket
    give me any style ill lock it,i could go emotion-al-the hard life poster child,feel those lryics most are wild
    or you could just let me boast for a while cuz i got the most style in my freestyle
    so put this on your favorites list and just savor this,i own the greatest hits i just witnessed your greatest miss
    so now you become my latest diss,everyone been awating this a mental picture im painting this
    you dont wanna see me on a deeper level,or our rhymes together my shoulders colder than december
    ill make sure you remain asleep forever now thats something to remember
    i got the finesse that keeps me apart from the rest always ready in case you wanna start with the best
    love the test,stay above the stress rhymes fatal like a slug to the chest,go home an hug ya vest leave ya mug a mess
    off the top of the mental ill rip you with this pencil coreners outline ya mic like a stencil
    you riding around in lacs but its only a rental
    dissin you is essential it just adds to my credentials now listin how can you doubt my potential??
    I SAID- dissin you is essential it just adds to my credentials now listin how can you doubt my potential??
    dont make me repeat myself you know my status is presidential your dealing with an intellectual so be respectful
    the undergrounds hero,superman im super-man you just stupid man
    your rhymes are fictonary i rip it homie with out the need for a rhymin dictonary
    your imganary fairy shit aint scare me ill leave you with vivid images of mary if you dare me so please spare me
    you cant compare to me,me loosing thats rare to me
    your to weak with lines,come holla when you wanna compete with rhymes
    ill take my sweet time to complete these lines at the same time delete your kind just to let you know you cant defeat my mind, peep my shine- i wine and dine im doin just fine,wanna hear it again just press rewind,private- i keep the press behind
    the more you search the less you find ill give you the best of mine-the rest of my time








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      damn...most posts that are this long usually aren't that good from beginning to end but u kept ur flash and flare the whole way through. this seemed to me to be something like an introduction and a warning to the general public to let em know who u are and that u are not to be [censored]ed with under any circumstances. ill [censored] ridiculous. u and SinCeer make quite the duo cuz ur styles are different but u both have that lyricism [censored] on lock
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      man u def got attitude aplenty, im luvin it,even though i dont know you, it seems as though you totaly let loose on this one to show who you realy are, i loved you got sixty bars, ill go seventy if you let me, talent i got plenty. realy stood out to me shows u got guts and determination, lovin it,
    keep em cumin,
    adding it to favs
    kyrenia
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      GOod read:
    "you rappin lushes still holdin crushes i got ya girl splittin dutches im the master of punches"
    Nice idea
    IT was real talk coming from you. But who are you battling? Ha. I think your going against the world. Or attempting too. I think i might step in and post another diss for you. Give you something to work with.
    PC
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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