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Land of everlasting night

Author: morte
ASL Info:    17/female/earth
Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430 /348 /55
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Land of everlasting night

In this land of superstition
Walked by the dragons and devils
The roads are guarded by crosses
Watched by castles and fortresses
Inhabited only by ghosts
And the centuries of legends
Never giving up their secrets
Death roams freely in the forests
Not domesticated or caged
Nor tortured into submission
As shadows stretch across the land
The full moon spills into the sky
Magic runs rampant in the dark
Bringing the sweet release of change
Transformation to a new shape
Immortality comes creeping
Out from the grave and the dead walk
In the stillness of eternity
The night will be everlasting

Submitted on 2006-03-23 21:39:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was simply awesome! The strong
describing words you used, made it all
so real to actually image while reading.

No long comment, just wanted to
drop by and let you know I like you’re
style and hope to see some more in the future

Keep well
| Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Lee | [ Reply to This ]
  Alright, well I wasn't going to leave a comment, because to put it simply - I don't see anything wrong with it. I didn't think posting anything would really be worth it, being as I don't have any comments that will 'improve' anything about this. I love it as is. It's truly unique. I do think that it could be a part of something bigger though. It describes the setting of what could be quite the impressive write (story). I absolutely loved this line :

The full moon spills into the sky

The way you expressed it as the moon 'spilling' into the sky was beautiful. It painted a great picture in my mind - one I hope will not leave any time soon. I can definatley learn something from your style, and your choice in words... I loved it.
| Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]

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