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    dots Submission Name: Land of everlasting nightdots
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    Author: morte
    ASL Info:    17/female/earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430/348/55
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLand of everlasting nightdots
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    In this land of superstition
    Walked by the dragons and devils
    The roads are guarded by crosses
    Watched by castles and fortresses
    Inhabited only by ghosts
    And the centuries of legends
    Never giving up their secrets
    Death roams freely in the forests
    Not domesticated or caged
    Nor tortured into submission
    As shadows stretch across the land
    The full moon spills into the sky
    Magic runs rampant in the dark
    Bringing the sweet release of change
    Transformation to a new shape
    Immortality comes creeping
    Out from the grave and the dead walk
    In the stillness of eternity
    The night will be everlasting





    Submitted on 2006-03-23 21:39:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was simply awesome! The strong
    describing words you used, made it all
    so real to actually image while reading.

    No long comment, just wanted to
    drop by and let you know I like youre
    style and hope to see some more in the future

    Keep well
    Lee
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Lee | [ Reply to This ]
      Alright, well I wasn't going to leave a comment, because to put it simply - I don't see anything wrong with it. I didn't think posting anything would really be worth it, being as I don't have any comments that will 'improve' anything about this. I love it as is. It's truly unique. I do think that it could be a part of something bigger though. It describes the setting of what could be quite the impressive write (story). I absolutely loved this line :

    The full moon spills into the sky

    The way you expressed it as the moon 'spilling' into the sky was beautiful. It painted a great picture in my mind - one I hope will not leave any time soon. I can definatley learn something from your style, and your choice in words... I loved it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]


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