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    dots Submission Name: Clouds of emotionsdots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    31/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 153/95/114
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1022
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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       to tell the world that nature and humans have a very close and intimate relationship.

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    dotsClouds of emotionsdots

    Par thy sight might be unto the endless stars,
    Fear shall not behold itself into the night.
    May the sun shine with happiness and love for to
    Bring upon the heart with sickness as blight.

    The wind and wave flow shall it through forever,
    does the stars that shine that glow with sight.
    May the shyness of earth be held upon us,
    Will the cloud of emotions that keeps on the fight.

    Have not seen the broad of the narrow
    Prospective through thy or the eye of a bird.
    Fills the dark with the light of a candle,
    The light of clouds the rainbow absurd.

    Like not shall we in this world of dreams,
    Hope not will be the end of pain.
    Cry not shall we in this world in vain,
    Will the cloud of emotions that drives us insane.

    Must not the sun rise in the west?
    Cannot be told by the sand till death.
    Silence of noise that comes out in the day,
    Peace in the heart the end of a breath.

    Does not tree cry when itís chopped?
    Its eyes itís legs itís feet itís heart.
    Understand may not we the tip of a mountain,
    Will the cloud of emotions that makes us apart.

    Submitted on 2006-03-23 21:52:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked this write, though i don't know you used "par thy" in this it really stood out as not belonging to something written this way, or maybe it did and i don't even realize it. THIS WAS REALLY GOOD, did i say that? well you should be patted on the back it was great.
    Keep writing i hope to see more by

    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      "the lights of clouds the rainbow absurd"
    I completely adore that line...I might even quote you on that, its a lovely line. I was a little unsure of this piece at first. I thought it was a bit forced. But after continued reading I became enthralled. You expressed yourself wonderfully each word had a purpose. You truely reached down into the soul of creativity...It reminded me of Percy Bysshe Shelley.
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]

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