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    dots Submission Name: I Amdots
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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Me
    Total Views: 764
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 632



    Description:
       Background behind this piece- It was actually an assignment for school, except I was suppose to do it on Vincent Van Gogh, which I did but I ended up making one about myself. Its sort of different in style but its very descriptive of who I am. I am looking for any kind of feedback, anything to improve it or anything thats bad. Let me know. Thanks!


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    dotsI Amdots
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    I am a poet and a singer
    I wonder how I'll die
    I hear the rain drops on the ground
    I see the angels in the sky
    I want to be loved
    I am a poet and a singer

    I pretend to be happy
    I feel the pain of life
    I touch his heart in many ways
    I worry I won't find love
    I cry over everything
    I am a poet and a singer

    I understand life is not fair
    i say god has a plan for everyone
    I dream of being successful
    I try to be a good person
    i hope I am forgive for my sins
    I am a poet and a singer




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      It was a good poem but there was no flow. My history teacher assigned us a similar poem, her assignment was to write about who we were. You captured your essence in your poem, and in many ways I found myself in your words. My favorite stanza is:

    I pretend to be happy
    I feel the pain of life
    I touch his heart in many ways
    I worry I won't find love
    I cry over everything
    I am a poet and a singer

    I think that this stanza truly lets us know your soul. In the other stanzas you are trying to assure the reader of something that you are not quite sure of, or so I believe but here you let the reader know how you feel and what you are. There have been many times in my life where I have pretended to be happy. There are times when I smile and it seems that it is something that I must do. If I don't smile then people around you start to worry and they ask questions. I don't like when they ask questions because I can find no answer, maybe because I am trying to satisfy their inquiries instead of being honest but there are just times when its hard to be honest and to prevent trouble it is better to pretend. I think that you will find love. It has to be out there. It must be, I myself am searching for it. It was a good poem and from it I could tell that you are a great person.
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]


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