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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 831
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       this one is just about love. just some questions and thoughts to myself, i guess. can anyone possibly relate to this???


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    how do you say good-bye
    when your so intertwined

    when your binded by the strands of time

    the things that hold you down
    & keep you by his side
    what is keeping us together?
    holding us hostage this way,
    by our own love-
    its such a thin line between love & pain-

    can you say good-bye
    when your so intertwined

    held hostage by the hands of time

    please tell me softly-
    whisper to me
    set me free
    I've tried to listen to my heart






    Submitted on 2006-03-24 10:06:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this alot. It makes me think about my boyfriend. Im not really "letting"him go, like breaking up, but he is going into the marines!!!! Bad time for him to go into the military, huh?! it sucks and i dont want to lose him. keep up the good writting
    (this is going on my fav)
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by i wish | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem its very deep. you put a lot into such little words and i think thats awesome keep up the good work!! byez!!
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Evie | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this writing. It is not overly complicated, but it could use a little more depth. I can imagine a shadowed woman reading this from a dusty corner in her room.
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by james110182 | [ Reply to This ]
      its hard to let go of being with the one you love because theres too much pain in the relationship, but loves bond makes it hard to walk away from the person.
    I felt this........i like it a lot
    God Bless
    lotsaluv
    Nadine
    | Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]


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