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    dots Submission Name: bestfriend VS boyfrienddots
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    Author: Kaila Turley
    ASL Info:    15/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 52/43/18
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 375
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 606



    Description:
       this is about a girl battleing for the attention and a friend ship liek what was once had


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    dotsbestfriend VS boyfrienddots
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    its hard to believe a girl
    you have known for 8 years
    will leave you in so many tears
    a girl that was like a sister to you
    made you feel so alone and so blue
    a girl that let a guy take up space
    where our friendship was taking place
    8 years of good times all gone to waste
    because love form a boy is all she tastes
    was a couple of months with a boy
    better than 8 years with a friend?
    not only a friend
    but a BEST FRIEND
    so the battle of boyfriend VS bestfriend is done
    because in this case the boyfriend won.




    Submitted on 2006-03-24 10:52:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i completely agree with what your saying, i can totally relate!...
    when it happened to me though we ended up staying friends... but im still afraid or something that she is going to do exactly the same thing with the next guy that comes along... so in a way, a part of our relationship is over... she completely changed for a guy she just met, and in the end only spent no more than 2 months with him. We had been friends for 6 years we did everything together we were like sisters... when she met this guy, it completely changed...

    sorry i should probably talk about your poem...

    it was really well written and the rhythm and rhyme worked well with what you were trying to say... the only thing i have to criticise on is maybe you could make it longer, elaborate on it maybe show more on how it made you feel...

    all in all it was really well written, and i'm going to add it to my favourites, just because i relate to it so well... thanx for sharing

    ~hannah~
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Its a shame that you feel this way (if it was real) but, I think we all need to just learn that you can have both a relationship and deep friendships its just a matter of letting ppl know you care, so I am sorry that your friend didn't let you feel cared for. The write was very honest! nice job
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by BrokenStream | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a great write. I know how that feels though, because i was in a situation similar to that. Good job in the write though.
    ~sweetme
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was sweet and sad. It's wrong for a best friend to leave the other for a boy friend, i know how it feels and it changes people. They try ti act to fit what the person they are going out with wants and when they do break up they have don't have any friends because of the way they treated the people they were friends with when they had that relationship. Many friendships die that way, and its sad. ~Crescent~
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]



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