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    dots Submission Name: Cradled in Love's Wombdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 302
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Description:
        Look at love and hate as a couple...this whole thing has a HUGE meaning, a larger one and then many little one's all throughout. There is some symbolism here and allusions as well. Just read it and tell me how it makes you feel, what it makes you think of and if you are really smart and think you have it all figured out tell me what you see.


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    dotsCradled in Love's Wombdots
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    Love spoke softly but with importance. Hate's head was at a downward angle. Love and hate were anxious. Love swam in white waters. The waves washed up on a beach with black, glittering sand. As the tide rose the black sand leaked into the sea. At first the sand was gentle and a light shade of gray crept to mix with white. Ultimately however, the purity of the waters were consumed by the dark sand. With the waters now tainted the line between land and sea disappeared into an abyss.
    From beneath the surface of the sea hate stood on the corals, his gaze cutting through the shades of gray and black. Love walked above Hate on the water, her bare feet stained with the wrath of the sea. She pondered. The world it seemed was lost inside itself. Fat with vanity and now self-destruction.
    Love broke through the sea and made a path for hate to reach her. What could she say to hate to make him understand? In the end they would be seperated. Their affair would eventually end when the conclusion of life was about. Love tried to make hate see that they were victims. The people of earth would decide, beginning with their own hearts and leading to the hearts of society whay would become of love and hate. Their destiny lay in the hearts of man. Hate lay down with his head resting on love's womb. Hate pondered. Then he asked love a question she could not answer. Just as lover's cannot survive without each other, just as Shakespeare had discovered with Romeo and Juliet, how could love exist without hate? Love and hate lay in the sea like children. Love cradled hate and hate caressed love's affection.




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      Love and hate have always been a couple and there is always a balance between the two. Its kind of odd how they work together and this shows in a way how hard it is for both to maintain that balance. If either one totally consumed the other, then their worlds would be screwed, ya know? Anyway, very intruiging piece Jaz.
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes love has to exist for hate to exist, and vise-versa. If not, neither would exist, which would make the world very boring. This is a very descriptive story. I enjoyed reading, and I hope you keep writing things like this.
    Oh, and thanks for the comment on "Sricken in the Eventide".I don't see myself as a good writer, because there are so many who are better,like you. But anyway cya next period.
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      All these crazy metaphors and hidden meanings that you've been using lately give me a headache... D*mn it, what do you mean making me think?

    how could love exist without hate? Love and hate lay in the sea like children. Love cradled hate and hate caressed love's affection.

    I particularly liked this part...It made a pretty picture, and brought to light an interesting thought...Love and hate cannot exist without each other... My head hurts now
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This was magically done and you put each out there - existing as they do - together and separate and open, either for humanity to decide - but is that a choice or a trap?
    I believe too that there is a spiritual balance that exists beyond our realm of understanding and that everything is and how would we know one without the other?
    Very well done and thought provoking and I like, too, how you have a multi-faceted piece
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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