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    dots Submission Name: ...WHY I STAY...dots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 300
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Maybe love isn't blind. . . . (this was the revelation that came to me when i spoke to a strong willed woman who was in a abusive relationship for 20years)

    this is the same woman who inspired me to write "She melted. . . "

    Thank you for any comments-gud, bad, funny, serious, relating, advice. . . .


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    dots...WHY I STAY...dots
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    They tell me that love is blind
    And that is why I stay with you
    They pointed out the bruise you left behind
    The one you carved with the heel of my shoe

    They tell me that love is blind and im in denial
    And that is why I stay with you
    They don't know that you love me dear
    Nor that you scared, filled with fear

    They tell me love is blind and that im weak
    And that is why I stay with you
    They say they would never let a man treat them this way
    I should be more of a woman and send you away

    They tell me love is blind and im just petrified
    And that is why I stay with you
    They don't know that at times you make me feel safe
    And only when addictions your master then I become your slave

    They can tell me love is blind
    But im looking at you with my heart not my mind
    For I see a boy who hasnít been shown affection
    And has grown into a man that craves all sorts of attention
    I see in you an adolescent suffocated by life
    Who thinks he doesnít deserve a second chance or a faithful wife
    I see in you a grown man who tries so hard to make things right
    For three full months you and your addiction would fight
    I see the failure you feel you are
    When you've lost and the addictions raised you one more bar

    . . . They are wrong when they tell me love is blind
    For it is this very love that opens my eyes
    to a wounded soul so many have just judged and come to despise




    Submitted on 2006-03-24 15:58:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *gives you a hug*

    I was in an abusive relationship for a long time. And I tolerated it thinking that the love would prevail....and it only got worse. we should learn to love ourselves first and put the rest of it behind us. A man that will hurt you in any way does not love you. He has a sickness within himself.

    You love, and you love, and you take, and you give....and nothing but pain comes from it.

    I knew to call it over when he beat me in front of my daughter.....in her room....and my blood went all over her bed spread.....and she sat there screaming....and he wouldn't even let me pick her up.

    Never let somebody take control of your beauty. I see the strength that you have in this write. And I know that you can over come any thing just as I did. All you have to do is know that what you are leaving behind is not what is intended for your future.

    Trust me....a man will come and sweep you off your feet....for me it happened after I gave hope. Takes a strong man to take care of a woman....but an even stronger man to take care of a woman and tend to her wounds.

    Much love,

    Li Li

    If you ever need me I am here!
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Much of our world is not perfect. I see this as real and honest. Hard and harsh but a vision that few are willing to voice.

    There are not many folks willing to give a voice to the reasoning that is not perfect or acceptable in the greater world.

    To me this is a painting of what is, not a clorozed airbrushed world.

    Well done.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Three things in this world I hate, warm beer, wet toilet paper and men that physically abuse a woman. But as you pointed out, it is her choice to go or stay and she decides to stay. Though he does have some good traits...who doesnt...it seems her perception of loving someone comes with taking whatever they dish out, even if it isnt always affectionate. Your write was very powerful. It started off showing her as timid and weak, but her strength comes from her ability to love a jerk, ya know? Very good write.
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, maybe because I I strongly disagree with any woman who feel love is the reason they stay in a abusive relationship is the reason this was not a hit with me. It was like she was making excuses for his behaviour and enjoying living in denial. What she fail to see was her self worth and fear of being without him or of him. Okay...I'm leaving that alone! As for the poem, your flow was not even, and the rhyming kept changing stanza to stanza. And the repetition of thoes lines was not needed in my opinion. I think that this was a good idea to show how a women in her shoes would feel. I think that it takes more strenght to leave than stay, but that's just me. I hope the best for your friend. All in all this was good.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, you really built the suspense up in this, with the repetition of the story, as you give us the history, and then letting loose with the reasons.

    Very hard-hitting, no criticism from me, I never expected you to change my mind from the cynicism I had after 8 lines or so, but magically, your last stanza did exactly that.

    Extremely well done

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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