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Author: sickly
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Words: 93
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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this is a recent piece that i had to change a bit before i posted it.i think that as feedback, i just want the readers to give it a chance and say what they think or feel is appropriate.


just a fallen star
and you can't help it
you've fallen in love
it was now or never

listen to the thunder
look at all the lightning
you're scared i know
here i go again

crystal as a vision
that is what it takes
the loneliness just drags you back
sharing in the rain

stealing it all away
holding the cards close
it has to be a change of everything
i'll show you that it's right

again and again
alive and feeling it
dead expressions
made up in war

Submitted on 2006-03-24 16:44:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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