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    dots Submission Name: Strip the souldots
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    Author: ellesmera
    ASL Info:    18. Female. England
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 43/263/115
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       well? wat can i say, its true...lol


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    dotsStrip the souldots
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    I sit in the corner,
    of my own little world,
    I watch you in anger,
    But see nothing but the pain,
    that you brought rashing down on me.

    Well, now look at you,
    In the corner I had been in, not a week ago,
    your heart in half,
    your soul in two,
    and I, I'm stood in front of you,
    How does it feel,
    To have your soul,
    sripped from you




    Submitted on 2006-03-25 05:21:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      all the anger you hussle this person about actually shows to be yours, and it's great if that's what you were trying to achieve. i like the way it turned out, the character is angry and fierce and striping his soul, and that's actually what you do. so was iit un purpose?

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    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by ParLon | [ Reply to This ]


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