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    dots Submission Name: stupid to let you godots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsstupid to let you godots
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    i listen to our song at night before rest,
    50 cents 21 questions, and all answers are yes.
    i love you your all that fills my head,
    i say a prayer for you just before bed.
    even when sleeping you apear in my dreams,
    but i cant touch you, so tears fall in streams.
    stupid i was to ever let you go.
    my future if not with you i would throw.
    away with my, troubles, sadness and grief,
    if only i had you back here with me.




    Submitted on 2006-03-25 14:41:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hiya hun, thanks for all your comments, my music ranges from style to style depending on my lyrics. I really liked this one, you really conjured up the image of your bedtime routine. it's funny how just a small routine during the day can become so focused on one person, but then i guess that's what love should be about. Can't say i'm a huge fan of 50cent, but each to her own! lol. try not to have too many streams of tears, even if it is really good imagery! talk soon, charlie x x x
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Charlie Poppins | [ Reply to This ]
      awwwwwwww this is soo cute this poem reminds me of a poem that should be put into a play. loved it
    i dont really see anything that you could improve or differently
    dd
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Darcey D | [ Reply to This ]


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