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    dots Submission Name: Garden of Edendots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGarden of Edendots
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    Paradise is an attitude.

    Surveying the scene about me now
    this earth could be the apple of my eye.
    Eden is even
    with the gardens of mother earth.

    Ever notice how when something becomes so familiar
    it loses its wonder?

    Maybe we never left Eden,
    just forgot to appreciate it.

    Beauty truly is in the eye of the beholder.
    and today is just another day in paradise!






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      I feel this way each day, I look for the best in everything at least most the time. I enjoy the garden, and would like to pick the frit once again, but the snake is guarding the gate and won't let me in. Hey, that's good, I'll add that line to a new poem I write, when I get in the mood again, thanks for the little inspiration again. I need my muse back, where is she? :-) Good writing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by man_in_PA | [ Reply to This ]
      Great stuff.

    The point is clever, right on and much needed.

    The write focuses on the picture and makes the message real.

    Good job.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, thanks for the wake up call!

    very well said, could probably be longer if you can keep the same intensity there, but extra good indeed!

    well done

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      It was quick, which in this case is a good thing. I love precise poetry that pulls you in and gives you a thought but does not hold you captive. The message in your poem is a thought provoking one. If you stay in one place too long or so something too often, its familiarity makes it grey. Loved it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't you just love this, I simply just love this.
    This was simply a profound write.

    Keep up the great work and have a blessed and wonderful day.
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice. I especially love the first line, it really pulled me into the write. This really was something to remember... the idea that we never left Eden, is unusual if not a great concept. What I really loved about this was that it made me think, wonderfully written... I loved it! I'd give this poem a 9.5 out of 10, spread your words like fire.

    Sincerely yours with a bloody kiss,
    Naymless.
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
      My Friend This is a deep write that really made me think
    Yes to live a Good Life one needs a positive mindset
    But I find it hard to think that Paradise is an attitude
    Paradise is everywher It is an actual place it is here it is everywhere
    In order to FIND true Paradise on Earth we need a good attitude that I agree with but Paradise in General is a Gift from the Good Lord for us all to enjoy
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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