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    dots Submission Name: ghetto blooddots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 435
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    Bytes: 707



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    dotsghetto blooddots
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    you make me happy when you say love is true,
    cos i believe in love when im with you.
    they pull us down when we rise to high,
    we aint up there yet, but we work hard and try.
    you protect me from the hard life you work in,
    people say your the big man in the making.
    you got that get up and go in you,
    and the ghetto blood that runs through.
    you come from the hard streets,
    where street fighters meet.
    guns, fists and knives touches everyonse fate,
    but i believe in you, and that it isnt too late.
    cos u care and hold me down,
    i want you to stick around.
    for our childrens sake,
    please before its too late.




    Submitted on 2006-03-25 14:55:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      great post it was short but got to the point also it was ona deep tip,i liked how to explained where you come from,ima big of writting like that too,i like to tell a story..paint a picture if you will,and the title really drew me in-nice job
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by PROlifik | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job, i take it u got a thing for bad boys lol, great ending great start great write and it was great reading it
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow really cool end rhyme. Dont you just love love?
    Thanks for the comment on mine..
    Keep the good work cumming!!!
    Oh yea!
    Amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      The ending was a perfect reason for a guy to play it safe.
    The lyrics were really honest too.
    Without a description to better understand it i could also say that this post seems like it could be used as a guilt trip on somebody.
    IT makes a lot of sense though definetly.
    I liked it.
    PC
    | Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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