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    dots Submission Name: No Love (Lyric Excerpt)dots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsNo Love (Lyric Excerpt)dots

    I was given birth,
    Perhaps that was life's only mistake,
    Even though it hurts today,
    I still remember what my Mom had to take.

    It was daily beatings constantly,
    My Father was a fag,
    But she still remained,
    Because of my brothers and me.

    Agressively and violently was my father's daily actions,
    I guess it was entertainment 4 him,
    His dialy satisfaction,
    My reaction,
    Was kept deep inside,
    I was afraid to ever intervene,
    I thought If I did, that day I would surely die.

    My Mom, had to look deep inside of her heart,
    She had to leave us,
    Even though it was ripping her apart.

    I did understand; yet nothing was planned,
    The problems at home,
    Were a product of a fucking maniac man.

    I don't hate my father,
    But he did pushed and shoved,
    Even though my heart can't take it today,
    I can never show him real love.

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