Dear Ryuki; When you say "suppose to" you mean "supposed to" But besides that I like you gathering of haiku that all deal with a singular thought. Well done. It tells a descriptive story. ~~Mykquillion
I liked it, and i think the repetition of the last line helps greatly to weave the three haikus together. It could be made better, but i think that the way it is right now is very good.
It's kinda opaque, but I think it's in a good way. It leaves it open to all and everyone to put in what's going on in their life. Yep, I like this one! Keep up the awesome work! Cheers, ~Persephone~
It is vague, open to interpetation, and difficult to decipher... exactly as a haiku ought to be. It is written in that vague, yet inwardly meaningful tradition of that sort of poetry.
I find it to be decent. I only complain about the second to last line, which is ... difficult to grasp. It's meaning is totally lost. I would suggest finding a different way to express the meaning of those last three lines.
This is really sad To me this write speaks of one filled with negativity and not sure exactly how to release it Writing is really good for the soul I hope you continue to write to relieve some of the negativity Good Job with this God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
Submission Name: The Demons in Me.
