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    dots Submission Name: I Wannadots
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    Author: shorty_ash
    ASL Info:    14
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 2/2/4
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1510
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 624



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    dotsI Wannadots
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    I wanna be the hand you hold
    The one that you first kiss
    I wanna see me in your eyes
    The one that you will miss
    I wanna be your every thought
    The one that you will save
    I wanna be your every wish
    The one that you will crave
    I wanna be your everything
    The one you long to hold
    I wanna be the world to you
    The one that you behold
    I wanna be the reason for the smile
    on your face
    The one that will never be erased
    I wanna be the one you love
    The one where your love will never
    go to waste





    Submitted on 2006-03-26 16:37:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Really nice poem and wording.
    I don;t have any fave lines, I loved
    every part of it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by music1dw | [ Reply to This ]


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