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    dots Submission Name: In The Parkdots

    Author: Areinaka
    ASL Info:    20, F, Oregon, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 130/114/29
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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       This was a poem I wrote when my ex-boyfriend of 2 weeks had started going out with my best friend. I wanted to kill them. Can't tell, can you?

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    dotsIn The Parkdots

    Velvet agony courses through me.
    Eternal sadness pierces my desolate soul.
    Realizing I've truly lost everything.
    My world is turning dull.

    Hatred delves deep into my heart.
    Never to surface again.
    Death is my only thought.
    Refusing to commit to this dastardly sin.

    My blade is gleaming,
    Echoing the stars of night.
    I sheath it quietly,
    Waiting 'til the time is right.

    Skulking through the shadows,
    Dressed in satin black.
    I've gone this far,
    There's no way i'm turning back.

    Finding my victim,
    Sitting with his precious girl.
    I unsheath a dagger,
    And give it an experimental whirl.

    His arm around her shoulders,
    My thoughts are in turmoil.
    He kisses her with relish,
    My blood begins to boil.

    I run away swiftly.
    Back the way I came.
    Doing unto them what they did to me.
    With murder, there's too much shame.

    I disappear into the sky,
    Melding with a cloud.
    Never again, I tell you,
    Will I throw off this demonic shroud.

    'Tis very deadly if you ask me.

    Submitted on 2006-03-26 20:58:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i liked this piece alot, I liked the concept and the idea, how you wrote it, and how it flowed well,.

    "His arm around her shoulders,
    My thoughts are in turmoil.
    He kisses her with relish,
    My blood begins to boil"

    I especially liked these lines,, they really illustrates the state of europhia and regrets and the rush,, this is a great poem i really liked it,.

    We be in touch keep writing.
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