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    dots Submission Name: Alzheimer's Pain...dots
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    Author: jules271
    ASL Info:    27/Female/MN
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 67/41/15
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 271
    Average Vote:    4.6667
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    dotsAlzheimer's Pain...dots
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    She was denied his comfort,
    he, his farewell speech.
    Their yesterdays were stolen,
    their tomorrows out of reach.
    He such a loving man did not,
    kiss his true love goodbye.
    She went home sad and lonely,
    he wondered who she was and why?
    First he forgot the little things,
    his age, the neighbor's name.
    She tried to cover his memory lapse,
    he could not understand her shame.
    Then his personality changed,
    eighty years of living gone.
    She became a stranger to him,
    no doctor could right the wrong.
    something took a big eraser and,
    wiped clean the blackboard of mind.
    Took the water of intelligent memory,
    and left an empty well behind.




    Submitted on 2006-03-27 00:55:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have an amazing way of writing you really know how to bring your readers into your piece and wow them. I cant imagine having Alzheimers or knowing somebody with it who in time would have forgotten my face and what i meant to them. It takes a strong person to do it.

    Peace,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      that was a really good poem. I really enjoy your writing. ive had family members with that illness but it was a grandmother to my grandfather. but the expressions you used.....amazing. no other words.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Euphoria | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good description of what Alzheimer's does to a person. My grandmother had it and she had to come live with my family so my mother could take care of her. She got to the point that she didn't know who we were or where she was. It was awful! Now I have a neighbor down the road that has it, and she acts like a kid most of the time.
    Your last 4 lines really sums it up what Alzheimer's does to you.
    DJ
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I think it was greatbyou are a talented writer. Kinda hard to relate for me though:) but it was nice.
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Cullen32 | [ Reply to This ]
      flippin heck i really love this......
    "took the water of intelligent memory, and left an empty well behind"
    loved the whole write :)
    i like your expression
    lotsaluv
    Nadine

    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      wow thats beautiful. felt really true. no doctor could right the wrong is a little cliché. i've never known anyone with the illness. but its sad.
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by CyclicHorizon | [ Reply to This ]



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