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    dots Submission Name: A Heart Confuseddots
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    Author: Death of Death
    ASL Info:    20 M Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 41/27/10
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Broken
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    Bytes: 661



    Description:
       She almost makes me want to kill myself. She never really loved me like I did her, but I once believed she did. I could remember how to smile if only I could forget about her.


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    dotsA Heart Confuseddots
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    I wanted your affection, your attention
    pretty smiles, and green eyes
    but there's this word that I just heard
    about you with other guys
    :Freedom:
    Untied from your laces of love
    I no longer care to ride with you
    To think that you came down from above
    you must of thought that I was a fool
    :Regret:
    Then your smile just hits my eyes
    and I wish that I could just die
    its easier than having to face you today
    My heart is still bleeding for you
    and I wish I knew what to do
    Now that I have nothing else to say
    :Returning to life without you:




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