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    Author: Death of Death
    ASL Info:    20 M Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 41/27/10
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    Bytes: 427



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       ....And I still dream about her.... How the fuck can we go back to friends; if she treats her boyfriend like shit, how is she going to treat her friends?


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    It's no longer your concern
    but the demons have returned

    Forget about me
    'cause I'm no good
    You're so perfect
    I'm just shit
    Forget about you,
    I wish I could
    I'm in Hell
    While you're "dealing with it"

    You know I live with so much regret
    Where else could I have been that day we met




    Submitted on 2006-03-27 04:44:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know how you feel. There are times with ex boyfriends when I just didn't know how I could be their friend after what they did. But sometimes it's good to get away from the past, and maybe after a while you can come back to her and tell her what you feel. Give yourself some air though, and don't try to use logic, life isn't logical and neither is love. And it was a great poem. I loved the form and the words you used, nice use of emotion!
    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]


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