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    dots Submission Name: recent pessimism.dots
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    Author: dublhelix
    ASL Info:    18/m/perth australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 43/36/15
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Like pale, fire in babylon
    I feel the push of weight
    and time is slowing me down.


    I will NOT go into the night
    i WILL search bereftly for the light
    to feel the sword and face the knife.

    I fear that i shall never see,....
    attain that pleasant symmetry,
    to study is to feed the mind.
    to burn the fire in the brain
    and search for what we left behind.
    Away the dross. civility remain.


    When looking back to lives once lived
    Rome was once a place on earth
    known to death, but still to birth
    the ideas formed from shapeless slime.
    Record rhythm, snder time.
    The days its war. and jackals brood.
    Wonder what the future brings?
    Ravens circle.

    and feed like kings.




    Submitted on 2006-03-27 07:15:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well i wasn't really sure the topic on this piece so its hard to critque it. Please give me a little insight on the piece and i will come back and try to comment better than this one, cause well pretty basically its not the best one i have left lol. Oh well get back to me when you can. Ciao for now. Amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by amber_in_wyomin | [ Reply to This ]



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