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    dots Submission Name: Between the linesdots
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    Author: Oli
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206/211/53
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 987
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 235



    Description:
       This poem is very short. If I can think of someting I might try to make it longer.

    now on the form of this poem, it fits the title so if you read it normally it will sound cool but won't make much sense. It shouldn't be that hard to read. Let me know what you think.


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    dotsBetween the linesdots
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    In between everything
    If only
    There is a hidden message
    We looked
    Which is easily over looked
    Between
    So we go on wondering
    What was being said
    Why things donít make sense




    Submitted on 2006-03-27 08:53:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well done, Caitlin, a poem overlapping another poem and making a complete poemn, a neat trick!

    You don't leave me anything to pick on, a very good message, and well written.

    Be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thi is a really clever write
    You show that people sometimes base their opinion on the first impression
    This can never be a good thing
    One needs to hear and learn from a person before they make an evaluation of how true that person
    Again Clever Write
    Well Worded
    I enjoyed reading this
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      lol, awesome!
    i love the idea. i wouldn't change a thing. it's not at all too short either. i would leave it just the way it is: short and sweet and complete.
    very well done!
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]


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