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    dots Submission Name: Time To Studydots
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    Author: Tom110989
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 35/56/21
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    Description:
       I wrote this while I was supposed to study for my exams.
    Try studying for your exams when this one person keeps entering your thoughts ...
    But I did ok on my exams I guess.
    Anyway, I don't know if she's ever going to read this, or if she knows that this one is for her ...
    Just tell me what you think.
    Tom


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    Time To Study

    Physics ...
    Newton said
    That everything is being pulled to the earth
    then why do I feel like I can fly ?

    I must concentrate
    I can't afford myself to think about you now
    To miss you ...
    No I can't think about you right now

    History ...
    I was taught
    History repeats itself
    Will I make the same mistake again ?

    I must concentrate
    I can't afford myself to think about you now
    To miss you ...
    No I can't think about you right now

    Biology ...
    Just great ...
    Could it be ?
    Butterfly's everywhere !

    I must concentrate
    I can't afford myself to think about you now
    To miss you ...
    No I can't think about you right now

    Maths ...
    We all know
    One and one is two
    That includes me and you ...

    I must concentrate
    I can't afford myself to think about you now
    To miss you ...
    No I can't think about you right now




    Submitted on 2006-03-27 11:09:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Tom-
    This is one of my favorites of yours! Its a cool concept and I like the reptition. One picky suggestion/correction- I think that you may mean "math" not "maths". just an gramatical nusiance.

    I hope that she knows you are something special. I'm attempting to study tonight too. History- EWWW. Anyway, I hope that she doesn't distract you too much my boy! Concentrate Tom- Don't let your attention slip. good, good- AH- You just thought of her didn't you?! Back to studying, slacker! X)

    I liked this a lot Tom- Its going on my faves
    SASHA LYNN
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Sasha Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Reminds me of someone who is so in love they really can'y concentrate on anything else. I thought this piece was fun cause your trying to avoid a thought, but really can't. I have had this happen to me to many times, unfortunately i don't usually do to well on the exams if this happens. Anyways.... this was a different type of love poem at a different approach that i have not seen yet, original, thanks for the write, ciao for now, Amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by amber_in_wyomin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great. I don't like to share my poetry with anyone I know either, even If I am talking about that person in the poem. I really enjoyed the way you conveyed your message about how certain things such as crushes can distract someone from the necessary studying.

    I also found something very interesting in this. I felt a need to question the international educational systems after reading this. The way a pupil performs exams is based on his/her mood before the paper and not necessarily the students intelligence.

    Your format, concept and originality is why I am chosing this as a favourite of mine.

    Well done, Tom


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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